PEER EDITING 03/15/2010

Peer Editing Feedback- ARIANA JOHNSON

1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?

I think her story is really good in detail and i like that she gives really good descripiton of things.

2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
I think that it doesn't need more sources, i feel the author did a great job with using sources, and yes the lead does involve me in the story.

3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.

Yes i feel the story does contain a well defined scene. I feel that she did a good job describing.


4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.


I think the whole feature story was great.

Peer Editing Feedback- Dann Augustine

1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
I think that his story had really good detail so i dont think he needs any more detail added.

2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?

None i feel the author used good enough resources and yes the lead involved me in the story.

3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Yes the story does contain a well defined scene i feel the story was really descriptive.

4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.

I think he did a really good job describing some of the personal stories and stuff so i really don't think he should take anything out.